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A monologue I originally improvised and recorded for fun. I have transcribed, edited and developed it further to create this piece.

Many super-villains of sci-fi and action films are surrounded by nameless, faceless minions. Here, one of them explains how (s)he got into the evildoer business, and describes a typical day at work.

Mild maturity rating due to mentions of violence.

If you would like to use or perform this monologue in any way, please contact me to discuss my terms.

UPDATE - 08/04/2013

A DAILY DEVIATION?! I'm not dreaming, am I? This is going to turn out to be some really lovely dream, isn't it? Any minute now, a unicorn is going to gallop into the room, carrying a nice cup of tea and some biscuits.

Thank you so, so much! This is beyond an honour!

You can read my journal entry about my reaction here: bookloverblue.deviantart.com/j…


UPDATE - 06/05/2013

The response to this piece has inspired me to explore the world of the evil minion further. I am now working on a comedy screenplay series called Evil Minions Union. Keep an eye out for new scenes and episodes!


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Questions for Feedback (optional)

1) Is the monologue funny and interesting? Does anything in particular stand out?
2) Is the character an intriguing figure?
3) Is the script format easy to read? (My main aim here is accessibility.)
4) Is there anything I could revise or improve?
5) Any other comments?

I recently joined a screenwriting class, so all feedback is highly appreciated!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-04-08
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw this pop in my inbox, and the title immediately got me excited. I love these things, and I've read some very good ones, so I came into it with fairly high expectations. I wanted humour, thoughtfulness and a different look into the lives of the mostly ignored minions. I figured I'd get two out of three, at best, but you delivered them all!

As another commenter said, I could really visualize a lot of the imagery you painted. The fact that you managed this through pure dialogue, and still never bogged down the work or stalled the flow is impressive! Good job!

And many congratulations on the DD! It was greatly deserved!
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! The DD was a shock, but a real honour. I'm happy that the piece met your expectations!
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'd say exceeded is a better word for it!
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That makes me all the happier! Thanks again.
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :bow:
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Dorieanna Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is FANTASTIC, it's hilarious. I love it.
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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silverrspells Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
beautiful
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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silverrspells Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
it just made my day ^_^
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LeeNTien Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
This thing just made my day.
And the fact, that the author then spent time thanking me and everyone else for favs and comments - just wow. =]

P.S. bookloverblue, I've liked this enough to translate it into my native language (russian that is). I'd like to send it to my friends and relatives, who do not speak English, if you approve of the notion. I'll certainly credit you. ^^
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've actually been accidentally considered a spammer because I've thanked so many people - I hope I can fix the problem soon!

As long as you send it to people privately and don't publish or share it anywhere claiming it's your own piece, then that's fine. A link to this page would be nice, too.

Also, could you send me a copy in a note? I don't know any Russian, unfortunately (the only other language I can speak and write in on a basic level is French!), but I'd be interested in seeing it.
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LeeNTien Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
Sure, no problem, will send it. =]

And I was going to send it privately, by e-mail, and with the link to the original anyway, but asking is polite, and sometimes authors aren't happy about it, and then one have to respect their wishes ^^
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FallenAngelItachi Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite nice! First this kind of thing I have ever read. Very amazing.
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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FallenAngelItachi Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome~!
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
clever and brilliant! I love the format and structure of the piece. congrats on the DD, by the way :)
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Finally read through it...amusing perspective. I like how much of the world is established in this dialogue alone; I found it pretty easy to imagine all this as narrative overlaid on visuals of the people summoning water or eating baguettes and then kicking some hero ass. Well done. :)
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for your comment, especially the part about the visuals. I'm glad that the piece was able to spark your imagination in that way. I, for one, am now picturing an evil minion "mockumentary" where a masked figure sits and chats to an interviewer while all kinds of crazy hi-jinks are going on in the background.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I want that to happen so much. :O
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Steve-C2 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
I've got to say, this is a well deserved DD. I admit to only reading it after seeing it on the DD list, even though it was there (I was reading your stuff here and there).

What I am liking about your writing is that you consistently bring a very unique, very different, and very unexpected point of view to the table. I've tried doing that with different things, but I have to say you seem to have a gift for just giving the viewer a completely different, and completely surprising perspective on some old standby characters, and this is just a great example. You seem to have a knack for bringing something that everyone expects to be dull, and putting it into a different light to make it fascinating. It certainly gets the imagination going; or if it doesn't, it's a very pleasant read.

So, once again, great job. :clap:

Cheers!
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very flattered! Thank you so much for your feedback!
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Dude! This is great!! Oh..hey...uh...we're doing monologues in my Drama class...if I say where it's from and who wrote it (credit given where it is due) could I...y'know...use it? If not, I have a back up that I wrote...I'm just hesitant because mine sucks.
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Did you actually perform this? If so, how did it go? If not, no worries!
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Nah, I didn't get a chance unfortunately, the teach shot me down cuz it wasn't what she specified. :( I ended up rewriting my own sucky one and managing to pull off a good score. Thanks though! :D
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries - I'm glad your work got a good score! :)
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for your comment.

I have no objections to somebody performing the piece - in fact, as a amateur playwright, I consider it an honour! - as long as I am fully credited, that you don't claim the piece as your own and/or publish it, and that it is used in a non-profit capacity. If your class teacher has said you can use monologues not written by yourself, and if you follow the terms I've set, then there's no problem.

By the way, I always think that my writing "sucks". Writers do worry about their pieces and how a reader/auidence will receive it. It's a sign that you care. The positive response I get from my works always surprises and flatters me greatly.

Best of luck with the class! Be sure to let me know what people thought of the piece!
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Cortanna117 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Omg!!! Thank you!! :D I actually showed it to my friend(both here on DA and in rel life - in my class) and she really likes it too. I think any compliment you get here is very well deserved!
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xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is pretty cool. Very well-written. I think a much deeper story could be built around this. And I don't know if it's just me, but I think the way this character talks, they sound more on the female side. At least, that's the voice I heard in my head. Anyways, congratulations on the DD. I hope a unicorn doesn't come along with tea and biscuits to ruin the moment XD
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your point about the voice is a fair one. After all, this is based on some improv I did after having a random idea, and I'm female, so the piece might have a more female voice as a result.

Thanks for the feedback!
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xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah that makes sense.

You're welcome! Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece ^w^
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blacksoul4321 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
I love it. Do you have more like it?
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have a Fairy Godmother monologue as part of my "Grimm Truths" re-imaginings series.
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blacksoul4321 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
Awesome. I will be sure to check it out.
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AzulKindle Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't know how I missed this one! Thank you!
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PlagueJester Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
OMG, that was absolutely magnificent! A total pleasure to read.
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much!
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PlagueJester Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
I think the most beautifully creative part was the "League of Sanity-Challenged Academics". Excellent name, just excellent!
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - I like to think up snappy league names!
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catiescarlett Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
I loved this. This is both hilarious and sad - I feel bad for the poor minion that he or she couldn't get into sidekick work. You really managed to create a great character and mood with this. Great job, and congrats on the DD!
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much!
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SkyPirateWolf Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
I absolutely adore this, I don't stop and read most of the written DDs, but at the mention of evil minions, I had to see and what mischief had to be a part of this. I think it's actually cute (as weird as it may sound). Minions have always been the background trouble makers that don't get much credit when it comes to the full scheme of things. Also, to add onto the fact that they are simple workers, it gives you a new feel to why they are who they are, and that they are the same as normal people in the fact that they sometimes hate their jobs too.

All and all, you've drawn my focus in, and not a lot of writers do that for me, so congrats on having something very worth reading. I enjoyed it greatly. ^_^
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for your feedback! I'm glad that you enjoyed my writing - evil minions are always a good way to hook in an audience!
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SkyPirateWolf Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
Then you might want to write more about them...just to enlighten us more on the complexities that you have so amazingly touched on. I'm not saying you have to. Just to humor the audience. :iconsweatplz:
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bookloverblue Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry - it's a fair suggestion! And an interesting one, at that!

I'm trying to work on new comedy scripts all the time, so I may well revisit this idea. Perhaps I could write a scene where several minions have a review meeting with the Great One. That might be a fun thing to try and write over the summer - I could even think up some villainy-themed motivational posters to go in the background...
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SkyPirateWolf Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
That sounds great! ^_^ I wish you the best of luck.
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Blood-Red-Cure Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
In case you care, every "they" that refers to the evil minion is wrong. The word they is plural yet in those cases, you use it as singular to refer to the minion because it does not have a gender identified. For it to be grammatically correct, it must be either she/he (or he/she) or it.
Other than that, congrats!
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